Saturday, 24 September 2011

Is this a good essay 10 points?

my friend sended it to me and wondered if its good at least for a b plus.



Strange how we don't get a say in the one word we utter the most about ourselves - our name. It could be a name that we personally don't like the sound of, or a name that rings out like music to our own ears, but it is our name, our identity and we don't get to pick it.

To me my name is like trees in a forest even though sometimes you feel like cutting them down there just a part of you that you cant get rid of. My story is when I first researched my name it actually described a lot about me and meanings to it. For example the definition/personality of my name is smart, funny and nice and that really describes me im nice 95 percent of the time . Usually I like to cheer people up when there glum and crack a joke at home or with friends . Im not so sure about the smart part though because im not exactly an Albert Einstein when it comes to school, but when I was still barely a baby my mother named me after my great grandmother who was a independent and graceful woman and meant a lot to her she had always wanted to name one of her children that I guess I was the lucky kid . My parents say my name means “gift of god” to them and represents the talented and wonderful young girl you are ”. The name sounds feminine and adventurous which is a streak I have running through me. Sometimes it bothers me that people usually incorrect my name for Elizabeth ,Lizabeth ,Beth no one ever seems to get it right no matter how many times I explain it its like a unsolved riddle to them they say it leaves a sloppy feeling in their mouth but it means its unique because its pronounced more rarely and not very common. My name represents a queen and “a queen has power” like my grandma says ,so I should be proud of who I am. If I had to change my name I would change my name to Athena because that name has a great vibe . It sounds so cool and powerful plus its very easy to pronunciation ,its music to my ears ,and ist a Greek goddess but im not Greek and not even close so that name would not relate to me in any way but sound after all if you change your name it will just be a new name but it will not describe you or relate to you in any way. Maybe someday a nickname but that only because my name connects to my ancestors and it is beautiful in every way. Who knows maybe a million years from now when im old and dead on the ground or being examined by aliens I don’t know it will be a very popular name.
Is this a good essay 10 points?
It is very good

Why?

1. Punctuation and spelling is in tact

2. It's interesting

3. It makes sense - even to me (who doesn't know about this topic)

4. I like how there is a topic and concluding sentence!

Well formatted!

Little Hint: DOn't put your essay on the internet - it is too easy for someone to plagiarize!!!



Otherwise... Well done! I give it an A.
Is this a good essay 10 points?
Lol i loved it! hehe



ummm %26quot;and ist a Greek goddess%26quot; should be and it's a Greek goddess no?
YA ACTULY IT IS NOT SO BED QUITE GOOD.
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